The haunted house

Me and my friend’s were walking home from school and we were so happy because it was Saturday and we were going to the woods. The next day, we went and it took 1 hour and 1 minute.  We had lots of fun.  When we got there, it was dark.   A few minutes later, we heard some sounds and we thought it was the wind but it got louder and louder. We all saw a green light coming from a room and we started to run towards it. They stopped and they all had a drink.  I forgot mine so next time,  I will remember.

4 thoughts on “The haunted house”

  1. Hello Daisy,

    Hiking in local national parks here in Australia, I always carry water in my backpack so I know how important it can be. Your interesting story is a good warning to remember to take something to drink when out in the woods. Well done.

    Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
    Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia

  2. Oh my goodness, I don’t think I would ever be brave enough to go walking in the woods in the dark! I also think I would be running away from the green light, rather than towards it. Eek!
    I wonder what happened after your friends had their drink?

    Thank you for sharing your story,

    Michelle, Team 100wc
    Melbourne, Australia

  3. Hi Daisy! This was an interesting story. I wonder what the green light was? The narrator and their friends must have been pretty thirsty to stop their run towards it for a drink. I thought the atmosphere in the line “we thought it was the wind . . . ” was pretty suspenseful. As a side note, “1 hour and 1 minute” is a nice, poetically specific amount of time to spend walking to the woods.

    Great work and keep writing!

  4. Hello Daisy,

    Having to incorporate the prompt into your write-up, the story ends with one wondering what they must have found inside that room. Nothing scary, I hope.
    Keep up the good attempt, and continue to write, Daisy.

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