The mysterious lock

There once were 2 children named Lizzie and Joel who wandered into the mysterious dark forest that no one dared to enter.  These kids were like no other – these kids were dare devils. They would do anything.  Suddenly the kids found something  – a historical structure.  The structure’s bolts holding it together were rusting.  Suddenly they saw a rusty lock on the door. “A lock!” shouted Lizzie.

“Ugh how do we get in?”said Joel.
“HOW AM I MEANT TO KNOW!”shouted Lizzie.

“jeez!”Joel shouted.  They saw a code engraved on the wall it read 9162. Lizzie said, “Let’s try that,”.Lizzie entered “9162”.

A  voice giggled then the door creaked open.  They entered then they were never seen again…

One thought on “The mysterious lock”

  1. Your piece had me on the edge of my seat. I could feel some tension building between the characters when Lizzie shouted at Joel. I like how you mixed in both narration and conversation to move the story along.
    Keep writing.
    Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA

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