the package

It was late at night and I was in my bed snoring my head off. Then somebody knocked on my front door.  I woke up from my dream.  Then I ran and nearly fell down stairs.  When I got to the door, I shouted WHO’S  KNOCKING AT MY  DOOR THIS LATE AT NIGHT.  Then  I heard someone running away from my front door.  I said they must have heard me screaming my head off ;-;.  I went outside and saw a package that had the name to Ellie on it.  I was so tempted to open it, but I knew I shouldn’t, but I had to see what was inside…

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  1. Congratulations on your response to this week’s challenge Faye. I like that you wrote in a first person voice. It made the writing seem very personal. The use of capitals for shouting was effective, but remember you still need speech marks around the words you shout. Often you don’t need to write ‘then’ because your reader will recognise that what you have written occurs in sequence. You left me wondering what was in that late night delivery for Ellie? 😊

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